essay. Compared to the last essay I wrote, this essay
that was about Sylvia's adventure up a tree was written much more thoroughly.
Although it still lacked analysis, the overall essay was a lot more organized and
detailed than the previous one.
Some of the problems that I saw in my previous prose essay was that there was
not a clear thesis and definitely not enough analysis. The examples were not
strong enough to fully support my claim. However, in this essay, I made sure to
make my thesis statement a lot more clear than the one I had written before
because we had spent time during class to go over the needed parts of a proper
thesis statement. This helped me lay out the other paragraphs in my essay which made
that was about Sylvia's adventure up a tree was written much more thoroughly.
Although it still lacked analysis, the overall essay was a lot more organized and
detailed than the previous one.
Some of the problems that I saw in my previous prose essay was that there was
not a clear thesis and definitely not enough analysis. The examples were not
strong enough to fully support my claim. However, in this essay, I made sure to
make my thesis statement a lot more clear than the one I had written before
because we had spent time during class to go over the needed parts of a proper
thesis statement. This helped me lay out the other paragraphs in my essay which made
me use the limited time that I had much more effective.
Similar to the first prose essay, but a little better than before,
there was a lack in analysis in my essay. Although there was more analysis to support
my claim and explain the quotes, there was not a 1:2 ratio of quotes/details and analysis.
there was a lack in analysis in my essay. Although there was more analysis to support
my claim and explain the quotes, there was not a 1:2 ratio of quotes/details and analysis.
I find that there is always a lack of analysis in all of my essays. I can't seem to go in
depth of the passage and meticulously break down each sentence to look for insightful
details. I think that I rely too much on the quotes to explain and support my claim without
thoroughly analyzing WHY it supports it. This is a hinderance to my writing because
just stating the quote with a one sentence explanation of why the quote is important to
the passage is not effective.
In constrast to the the weaknesses in my essay, there were also strengths.
In constrast to the the weaknesses in my essay, there were also strengths.
1) The organization was clear which made the essay flow well.
2) The tone changes were described well in the essay.
and 3) There was good analysis of the different literary elements.
I feel like being exposed to the first prose essay, this second one made a lot more sense and was
a lot easier to write which is why I had a lot more definite strengths within my essay.
2) The tone changes were described well in the essay.
and 3) There was good analysis of the different literary elements.
I feel like being exposed to the first prose essay, this second one made a lot more sense and was
a lot easier to write which is why I had a lot more definite strengths within my essay.
I had an idea of how to organize the essay based on my "well-developed"
thesis statement. This generally gave a stronger more developed essay.
Although I am not satisfied with this essay, I am excited that I was not as clueless as before and
that it has some organization. Some of the things that I would like to specifically do better on is
finding more insightful informations and making stronger arguments.
Although I did get feedback from fellow AP Lit students, I would like to get direct feedback
from Ms. Graham so I know exactly WHAT it is that I need to improve on. This is because I got a
5 and a 7 from my 2 classmates who reviewed my essay which is a big difference in scores for this essay.
It would be a lot more useful if I knew what the teacher thought.
It would be a lot more useful if I knew what the teacher thought.
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